Saturday, September 27, 2008

Jumper in Japan


There she sat wrapped in a shimmering white kimono on her white wedding dress, thinking this will be the last day of her freedom. Tazuko Komji sits sincerely while her friends and family watches her from out the window. No one knows her deep secret, a secret she’s force to hide from her future husband, a well off property investor. In a few minutes she will leave her parent’s house to her new bird nest that will become her prison cell for the rest of her live. Her thoughts began to wonder far away from the wedding to the day she saw two men fighting before her in the market. How strange it was to see a white man being brutally beaten up by a black man with white hair.
He held a strange stick hitting the bleeding face of the white man. She felt guilty from that day on that she was frightened to help the man lying useless on the ground. She hid quietly behind the fruit basket hoping no one could see her, when tears flow coldly down her face. That’s when it happened. The air went heavy and the grounds shake like an earth quake. Tazuko only had one option even if it means risking the one thing that she hid from the world.
“ help me”, the man scream.
“LET HIM GO”, the deep voice made the air reverberated. A strange shadow of a man walked towards them holding noting but his bag. Bloody Foolish man, what is he going to do she thought.
“It me you want Roland” he said with a cheeky smile on his face.
“Well it’s good to see you too”, he rubs the sweat off his forehead and took one step forward. Not even thinking of having a second look at his victim completely exhausted and wounded from the electric shock lying on the ground.
“It’s been…too long David”
David interrupts. “Well not really, having those pictures of you staring back at me in my room, it feels like we never lost touch at all.”
“Ahaha I see you haven’t lost touch of your humor too, well you’re going to need it after I kill you.”
Tazuko thought she was the only one, until she saw David teleport behind Roland but he was too slow for him. Roland quickly turns around and clicks his strange stick in front of David’s chest that released two electric ropes from both end of the stick wrapping David like a snake on a stick. Tazuko covered her mouth so that no can hear her screaming inside. David’s tears were blood and he couldn’t move muscle anymore. Roland thought it was an easy catch for him.
“You fell right on my trap boy”, Roland grabbed his Mobile, and just as he was about to dial he sense that someone was watching.
He could hear heavy breathing coming behind the fruit basket. He quietly walks towards it and recklessly pushes the baskets away. Tazuko quickly without hesitation ran but her speed didn’t match Roland wires. It grabbed her from her waist, pulling her back and fell bumping her head. She lies unconsciously on the ground. Roland walked up to her and saw she was still alive. Another man runs towards Roland.
“Sir what do you want us to do with them?”
“I want them both alive and make sure no one touches them… got that.”
“Yes sir… but what about the lady.” Roland stares down from the corner of his eyes.
“Leave her she just a witness; no one will believe her when she wakes up”
“But sir…”
“GO NOW!”
Roland and his companion disappeared into thin air before Tazuko woke up. She knew no one will believe her if she told. So she ran from the corner of the busy street where no one can see her and teleported to her home.

Since then Tazuko mind kept taking her back to that very day always wondering who David was and if there’s more out there just like her and David and who was Roland, what did he want? All that thought played on her mind like a tape recorder even when she was asleep.
“Are you already pumpkin?” a familiar voice interrupts her thought, wiping everything out off her thoughts leaving nothing but the anxious feeling.

6 comments:

Albie said...

Hey Erica,

I love your introduction to another new ‘Jumper’; I’m so looking forward to reading more of what’s going to happen to Tazuko. Your fighting scene between Roland, the anonymous Jumper & David is so descriptive, I can see the actions in my head, really enjoyed it. And the dialogues in the fighting scene are good; I could tell who was speaking and such. Just one greedy request, will there be a little bit more details on Tazuko’s background, like her childhood and how she for the first time discovered her paranormal talent or power...? It’s so refreshing to have another Jumper from another culture, who knows how many more are out there still oblivious to their ‘jumping’ talent.

Alby ^_^

annie said...

This is awesome Erica!

I liked the fact that your jumper character is from a totally different culture and that is what we want to see. Just want to back up on Alby's comment...it'll be nice to know how she found out about her gift of being a jumper, other than that your grammar needs to be double checked but that really doesn't matter because it's already perfect and unique the way it is.

-anNiE:D

Anonymous said...

Hey Erica
I like the way you introduced the new character of your Jumper, it was really effective and capturing. Also liked the way you used a flash back recalling the event where you first met/saw another jumper since you thought you were the only one.
Funny how all our fanfic pieces have flash backs in them hehe but i think it works well like that.
Good job using description too :)
Loved it.

Voluspa said...

hey guys

thanks to all your comments.
I will take Albys suggetion about giving more back ground info about our new jumper Tazuko from japan. That way we all can see how it all started from the very day she learn her new rare gift.

Thanks guys

Akash Sandhu said...

Good job Erica!!

I really like the character Tazuko!..especially the fact that she's from Japan just makes the jumper crew more interesting!First an Irish then An American , Italian and Japanese.

I agree with Alby that the description of Roalnd and David fighting was perfect. The way you said "the stick wrapping David like a snake on a stick" ...actions were described so well.

I wish we knew what was going to happen to Tazuko though. Will she be getting married? And how will David and Tazuko have something for each other when she's getting married. I would really wanna see some action there!

Albie said...

May be Tazuko will run away with David and follow her fate to become a true Jumper!!! That will be a BIG space for your creativity to take flight, Erica, hehe ;p;p;p

Looking forward to reading more about our Japanese Jumper on here.

cheers

Alby ^_^